Daniel Brown

Name: Julian Rafe Alvarez Nickname: Rafe Age (between fourteen and twenty): 17 Spell: Telekinesis Appearance: 6"1 with dark brown, long, curly hair and dark brown eyes. Athletic and dresses in ...

Name: Lord James Bedforde Age: 78 Status: (it's the Victorian times of course you have a status) Lord; Upper-Class Description: He is a tall, bulk of a man. But is ...

Eli I confirmed to both Nikolas and Ivy that we should meet by the South gate at midday- the sun prompted me that it was half-past eight. However, Jay didn't ...

Eli As I expected, Nikolas was friendly indeed, he greeted me and shook my hand. We seemed to hit it off quite well. Then a young girl interuppted. It was ...

Good stuff. It kept me hooked; I liked the two characters and more so their rather amusing relationship, I liked the idea behind Death's brother, in actual fact, I liked ...

I enjoyed this. However, I sincerely hope that there is more, and it has some sort of plot/storyline because this has potential to be an extremely good 'comical sci-fi'. I ...

Eli Ivy. Miss Ivy Kenneth. The youngest girl I know of to survive the nuclear accident, and she was older than Amy-Jo, much older. That made me anxious. It made ...

Thanks! It's R because the chapter gets worse, I shall edit it with the rest of the chapter in the very near future :)

Generally, yes, I think I would want to read more.

Another good post :) Well done. However, there are a few things. Again, again, again- description of the setting ! It's something that this needs . Don't get me wrong, ...

Me Again Shadow Thief, I want more, and I'm sure I ain't alone. :D It would be amazing if you could add more to this (finish the chapter, maybe?) and ...

First Impressions -Too short, but you did say it is incomplete. -Not paragraphed, no structure. Reading the first few lines -Sentences too long, and there are no commas, why not? ...

Love it :D - It's clever - It's well thought out - It's well described - It's well set out The line towards the end, "He would spend the rest ...

Woo! :D Me gusta! Me gusta! Pienso que el poem es fantastico! :D Yes, I'm English so my spanish may not be entirely correct, however, I am learning it :D ...

***The Beginning*** Chapter I Boom. The drumming began, slowly and steadily. The women- with faces flooded virgin white- began to call, then sing. Four men, dressed in nothing but a ...